December 09, 2006

THREE GIRLS TALKING ABOUT LOVE

Suddenly, they are sullen,
laughter gone,
eyes focused on
dark brown coffee.

Love has had its way with them:
elusive, warring,
filling their beautiful voices with scars

30 comments:

capegirl said...

very short and very powerful. yes indeed. indeed.

camera shy said...

cape

thanks
glad you like the piece

when should we look for your work again?

Anonymous said...

oh what a wonderful journal this is! i need to link to you right away!

thanks for stopping by and viewing my son's artwork. he is ten and has autism.

camera shy said...

meander

thanks for stopping by
i really liked your site


your sons work is priceless

floots said...

love that final image of voices scarred by life/love
great observation
cheers

Medusa aka expiringpoet said...

Yes, I agree, we're all carrying around with us past scars. Love can really screw around with your head unfortunately :(

camera shy said...

floots

thanks
it always shows in our voivces
the damage we carry

camera shy said...

medusa

yes
it is hard to devote to other and really truly mean it without picking up ther woundes too.

polona said...

very effective. love it!
ah, the scars we're wearing...

camera shy said...

polona

my own scars
rear their ugly heads
even when i see them coming
and i try to keep them down

so hard to allow ourselves to be vulnerable and find strength in that

Pat Paulk said...

Conversations I try to steer clear of... Great little poem CS!!

camera shy said...

pat

im assuming you meant for you personaly

yes, easier to hear than to have

Prmod Bafna said...

Concisely brilliant and powerful indeed! Love the last line lots too!

"filling their beautiful voices with scars" :)

camera shy said...

prmod

thanks for the high praise
all based on a conversation i really overheard

the girls all sat talking about the boys they wre dating (the girls were college age) and they started out all excited talking about how cute the guys were and how bad they were and slowly they lost their excitement and they talked of how bad they boys treated them and how miserable they were in the relationship, how they felt abused and used until finally they stopped talking altogether and fell silent for a very long time.

Anonymous said...

been there, done that myself...usually followed by a bit of blues and punk music...not necessarily in that order.

camera shy said...

johnb

ahhhh
the blues

funny how its genre title defines a feeling.

how many other art forms can make that claim?

andrea said...

Old girls, not young girls I hope...?

camera shy said...

andrea

they were college students
early twenties

still not old enough yet to keep from playing loves fool

Anonymous said...

Wow. You have a wonderful way of stringing your words together and rendering them more meaningful with perfect images. =)

Glad to have stumbled upon your lovely blog. Keep at it! ;p

camera shy said...

irene

thanks kindly
glad you stopped by

drop by again soon

Anonymous said...

This is excellent. Short, but it says much. Good work.

Not that I'm much of a critic, but I enjoyed it!

Anonymous said...

little sentences that pack a punch...
my first visit here, came through sophie's blog...
hope u'll visit delhidreams someday :)

camera shy said...

dorky dad

thanks for dropping by
a fellow minnesotan i see

how is new brighton?

camera shy said...

adi

thanks for stopping by
good to have you here

i just topped by dehlidreams

you are doing some nice work
ill stop by again later to take a longer look

Clifford Duffy said...

Camera, you sent this beauty to the Brim, so thank you. Indeed, it was a kick ass verse.

camera shy said...

clifford

thanks for stopping by and thanks for the kind review

sigmund fraud said...

Good one.

camera shy said...

sigmund

thanks

Anonymous said...

Why am i thinking Sex and the City here :) Lovely

camera shy said...

motorama

hmmm
that i dont know the answer to
ive never watched the show